I’m trying to formulate an argument that can be used in a political discussion or as a text on a political website. Can anyone please give me a feedback if it is formulated grammatically well (I’m nativ german). Primarily I’m interested in two things:
(1) Are there any linguistically errors?
(2) How convincing is the argument (regarding it’s content)?
I am especially concerned about the red text between the question marks.
Within a capitalistic system even those who favour a collectivistic lifestyle can live in accordance with their preferences. There is no rule that prevents people from joining up and founding their own collective within a capitalistic system. If a hundred of people would decide to put their money together, buy a piece of land, found their self-sufficient-community and establish socialistic rules – nobody would hinder them.
Capitalism enables individuals to choose even a socialistic lifestyle within the capitalistic framework – if anyone wants to. But on the other side socialism is defined as a system that dictates everyone to work for the state, there is no opportunity to produce and sell products on one’s own, no opportunity to trade goods, provide service for money or to start up your own business – people just have one option: they are obliged to work for the state and live along socialistic rules.
So capitalism ?allows/provides? a socialistic lifestyle ?within it’s framework?(as well as enjoying all the possibilities free market is offering) but socialism does not ?provide/allow? a capitalistic lifestyle [within]. If capitalism provides every lifestyle an individual ever can want - why should anybody promote socialism anyway?
How is English this? (How nativ does it sound?)